林奥

　　雅思写作的连贯以及衔接(Coherence and Cohesion)具体在写作过程中考生需要注意包括两大部分：段落之间的连贯(Coherence)和每段内部句群之间的衔接(Cohesion)，在雅思四项评分标准中属于比较容易突破的一项，也是写作考官在评卷过程中比较容易给高分的一项。

　　第1类错误：连接词过于生硬或者过多

• 错误分析

　　有了一定写作基础的考生，往往忽略连贯的多样性，使得一篇作文的连接词变得异常死板和僵硬，灵活的连接词在一篇7分作文中是十分有必要的。

• 例子

　　首段连接词死板：

　　学生版1：

　　Firstly, the users can send E-mails to our friends in other countries in a few minutes while sending a traditional letter takes people at least a week and costs much. Secondly, users can make friends with people from all parts of the world. It overcomes the geographical barriers and makes the world smaller.  Thirdly, the Internet accelerates the flow of information and spreads education to all corners of the globe. We can have easy and quick access to the latest information worldwide.

　　修改版1：

　　The users can send E-mails to our friends in other countries in a few minutes while sending a traditional letter takes people at least a week and costs much. These Users can also make friends with people from all parts of the world. It overcomes the geographical barriers and makes the world smaller.  Another point, the Internet accelerates the flow of information and spreads education to all corners of the globe. We can have easy and quick access to the latest information worldwide. 注：7分段的连接词不宜使用的过多（整篇文章控制在6-7个较明显的连接词即可）和过于明显

　　第2类错误：主题段落缺少中心句

• 错误分析

　　当一个段落中包含着2-3个小观点（好处／坏处／原因／解决方案）时，一定要在每个段首写出一句概括性的中心句。

• 例子

　　学生版：

　　The users can send E-mails to our friends in other countries in a few minutes while sending a traditional letter takes people at least a week and costs much. These Users can also make friends with people from all parts of the world. It overcomes the geographical barriers and makes the world smaller.  Another point, the Internet accelerates the flow of information and spreads education to all corners of the globe. We can have easy and quick access to the latest information worldwide.

　　修改版1：

　　The application of E-mails has brought us three aspects of advantages. The users can send E-mails to our friends in other countries in a few minutes while sending a traditional letter takes people at least a week and costs much. These users can also make friends with people from all parts of the world. It overcomes the geographical barriers and makes the world smaller.  Another merit, the Internet accelerates the flow of information and spreads education to all corners of the globe. We can have easy and quick access to the latest information worldwide.

　　但是当每段只有1个小观点时，那么观点句本身就是中心句了，不需要额外再写中心句了。

　　修改版2：

　　Although there clearly are some demerits, I strongly believe the application of E-mails has brought us much more advantages. The users can send E-mails to our friends in other countries in a few minutes while sending a traditional letter takes people at least a week and costs much. These users can also make friends with people from all parts of the world. It overcomes the geographical barriers and makes the world smaller.  Another merit, the Internet accelerates the flow of information and spreads education to all corners of the globe. We can have easy and quick access to the latest information worldwide.（这个版本涉及到承上启下的段落过度方法，请考生认真研究）

　　第3类错误：指代错误或者不清晰

　　- 错误分析: 每个段落内部代词（this/that/these/those/such/which/it/they/them）的使用是很多考生忽略的考点。大部分考生把注意力放在名词的同义替换上，造成词汇压力和考场速度减慢，其实这些问题都在代词指代上或许可以找到出路。

• 例子

　　学生版

　　Adverts are almost everywhere (e.g. on TV, on buses, on mobile phones and even in toilets), largely dominating domestic consumption. Nonetheless, how further it can genuinely help those advertised products remains a contentious matter. While sales can be considerably promoted, I vehemently believe adverts are also effective in raising the quality.

　　修改版

　　Adverts are almost everywhere (e.g. on TV, on buses, on mobile phones and even in toilets), largely dominating domestic consumption. Nonetheless, how further they can genuinely help these advertised products remains a contentious matter. While sales can be considerably promoted, I vehemently believe they are also effective in raising the quality.